At 2/14/07 11:12 PM, PenguinLink wrote:
I finally had the chance to read your story, Sentio. So, let me begin my thoughts of your work:
Awesome- I was wondering if you had or not :)
You did an awesome job, Sentio. I really liked the sophisticated vocabulary you used and it made it seem formal. The story-telling was great as well.
Sophisticated vocabulary? That was entirely unintentional- it is just the way I write, and most likely talk as well. I'm glad you appreciated it anyway, I didn't even notice!
I could picture every scene in the story quite well. You're descriptions provided clear pictures of the scenes that were being described.
Your the second person who has said that, so yeay :). Descriptive writing is a challenge for me after so many years of science writing, where description is actively frowned upon. Everything is supposed to be very precise, with no 'flowery language' as my lecturers like to say. I'm glad it came across well :)
Coincidently enough, I found some connections between the novel I stated to you I was reading (One Hundred Years of Solitude) and I found it to be quite interesting. If you were to read the book, you'll see why I say this.
Well now I really am intrigued. You can bet that I will be getting my hands on that book when I get the chance. There was actually another book that gave me a little inspiration for this story, but I can't for the life of me remember what it is called, or who wrote it. I'll keep thinking about it and post it here if it comes to me- it was a great book, that much I do know.
There was one thing that I quite didn't find original though, if you don't mind me saying. The name you provided for the flying specimen, Bob, seemed to me that it has been quite overused and well not that original. It puts a touch of humor, which can be great if you intended this part to be amusing.
The humour was entirely intentional. I was trying to come up with the most surprising and inappropriate name possible for a giant flying monkey designed to kill people. And there was of course the obvious Blackadder reference- one of the funniest shows ever created. Whenever I think of Rowan Atkinson saying that name it always makes me laugh :)
Overall, you did a superb job and you indeed have magnificent skills. Keep up the great work, and I can't wait to read the next part. :)
Thanks, your kind words are appreciated, and given time will inspire me to write more. I doubt it will be a 'next part' as such- that was more of a one off thing, but you never know, 'Bob' might make a cameo appearance.
*Salutes*
*salutes*