At 1/20/05 10:50 AM, XwaynecoltX wrote: Anyways ramagi and others thank you for taking the time to review or going to review...

heh ramagi that 10,000 post count of SCd's meh overrated he is so done with hahahaha...

~X~

I havn't wrote it yet, I'm at the right point finally. I wanted it to be a certain number in my review count. I wonder what numebr it will be View Your Reviews (999).

YEAH!!!

Insane - Am I the only motherfucker with a brain?
I'm hearing voices but all they do is complain
How many times have you wanted to kill
Everything and everyone - Say you'll do it but never will

You can't see California without Marlon Brando's eyes

I am my Father's son
Cuz he's a phantom, a mystery and that leaves me
NOTHING!
How many times have you wanted to die?
It's too late for me. All you have to do is get rid of me!

You can't see California without Marlon Brando's EYES!

It's all in your head
It's all in my head
It's all in your head

I tried - You lied to me for so long
Everywhere I go, there's a sense of it
Freak on my antics and give me a choice
Doesn't matter if I give a shit
It's shit that you gave me

You can't see California without Marlon Brando's eyes

It's all in your head
It's all in my head
It's all in your head.

Do you wanna feel pain? Takin' my name in vain
Caring never felt so lame inside
Anybody else got pride? Do you wanna take my life?
Maybe I'll reverse my ride
Who the FUCK are you? FUCK YOU!
Better suck it up cuz you bled through
Better get away from me
Stay the fuck away from me!

I feel safe - Seems your saved
I feel safe - it seems your saved

Look me in my brand new eye

Mother FUCKER!!

Look me in my brand new eye

Hey guys, me again; and like always, with some poetry. Now this piece is not done, as you can see is quite shorter then intended. However, i just wanted thought on wordplay, grammer, the message, and if i am going in the right direction with this. Because if it is bad, then why write all 100 line sover, when i can find out now and only write 32 lines over. ^_^

I appreciate your help... here is what i have thus far:

100-Lined Personal Prayer
Free Verse
By, K. Myst Williams

To those above in strength or numbers,
I make a personal plea;
I ask that you lean patient,
For I am long-winded you will see.

Once upon a dire need –
Or simple pleasure in curiosity –
What is, and what was, was created;
Clean soul-ed, but blind, yet, in harmony.

Forgive me, for I have sinned;
As has my companions in life, spirit and kin.
I wish – nay – pray that the worst of life was not upon being free,
Though, that is only the beginning of what I, your servant, kneels upon thee.

Keep up! For my tongue is quick, I must say-
This prayer is as important to me, as to you; you’ll see.

For every happy there is equal hurt.
Sadly, the latter, is where the heart lies last;
It, too, takes granted is comfort,
But don’t feel bad; at times, it lies in the past;
As has all life which you have cast.

The worst of it has yet to come, I know.
However, it can only be greater, if we don’t bargain – somehow –
We must change, we must conquer;
What love is, and what is not.
Whilst life continues; and I, in the spiral, am caught.

Fear not! I have more then plea,
But leave and fall, not autumn, you see.
I swell and think of those with hurt
And seek but just, but all equalities.

Be free, give will, you say;
I say you’re dolt.
For non suffice that greater good;
And none can display, or even would.
....

Obviously, it is not done, but like i said, it is a work in progress.

3 ramagi

At 1/20/05 10:50 AM, XwaynecoltX wrote:
heh ramagi that 10,000 post count of SCd's meh overrated he is so done with hahahaha...

~X~

Again please, in English this time.

Welcome Eldarion, to this fine establishment. Tis fun, and you should read at your own eril, because people always pull you up for not reading, bastards.

Thats a weird fucking dream you had, maybe subconciously your afraid of being branded something, i dunno traitor/spammer/idiot i dunno, maybe just a feeling of rejection to a articular group, but your will pushed past it and you overcame, which is nice.

I also had a weird dream last night, i was in a shower and came out soaking wet, balls hanging in the air, and then i go out into my bedroom and theres this hot chick sleeping there, so i cuddle in and ... well, you will have to imagine the rest, theres ladies present.

Ahh, it's been a while. I've got some new poetry for you guys. This is malice, btw.

I fucking hate you

i know what you said
you know who you are
i hope you fucking die
you little fucking prick

i thought we were friends
then you go and do shit to me
its over
we're done
and life goes on
6 months later
you're well out of my life
and you fucking come back in
like an unwanted fucking child

I hope you know what its like
to get a beating from a former friend
because Ii'm going to fucking kill you
take a fucking metal pipe to your head
you useless fucking prick
I'll show yu what its like
to have people know what's wrong with you
when you're in a fucking wheelchair
cause I fucking paralyzed you for life
--

forget me

why
why live
when nobody needs me around
when nothing in my life is right
when I don't need to live

forget me
that's all you need to do
forget me
change your feelings
i'll be gone soon anyway

when I talk to you
it makes me wanna scream
makes me wanna bleed
makes me want to end my life
all this anguish...
all this despair...
makes me wonder
why do you even care?

forget me
that's all you need to do
forget me
change your feelings
i'll be gone soon anyway

I'll be gone...I'll be gone....I'll be gone...

she said dont
dont do it again for me
when you let things go to your head
it makes you do stupid things
and she said
I care about you
and I don't want you to go..
but why should I listen
I've been lied to before
maybe this is just a lie....

forget me
that's all you need to do
forget me
change your feelings
i'll be gone soon......anyway......
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untitled

Break through the glass
Soar through the air
see my life pass me by
I see the city lights
As I fall to the surface
I see the people walk
Cars go by
When will this end?

I think of you
MY heart starts to ache
When will I go?
Far for too long
I'm soaring
Flying to the ground
I wonder what will happen when I hit

What will they say?
Will the care?
I wont.

Breathe
The pollution in the air
These lives we live
Are destroying the world we have
So when I hit
The fucking ground
I hope you know it's all your fault

I have it all to you
And for no reason
You shut me out
And now it's time
Time for me to go away
I'll leave
Goodbye.

Will you miss me when I'm gone?
Take my dreams and set me free
Finally, god has set me free
And ridden me off this burden
This burden we call life

Just a few more seconds now
It'll all be done
I'll be there..
Three
Two
One.....

That is all. Enjoy

Thanks to anyone who's been reading and staying current with this story so far. I'm sorry about this, but you may find the next few chapters somewhat boring. They are more for development and explaination instead of the action that hass been happening. =/

Also, just so it doesn't look like I'm only submitting my stories here and not reading everyone else's, I'm confirming I've read all the posts that have been here since I started posting here. Sorry if I don't comment, it's because I hate talking about literature. After going through AP Literature this year, I can't stand talking about it. >_>

Well, for those of you who have been waiting:

Control-Part XV

Alkador's face was still covered by the bronze gauntlet as DanMalo began to explain. "This is in fact not the first time an incident such as this has happened before." said DanMalo, by this time he had let go of Alkador. "Exactly twenty years ago--" started DanMalo before he was interrupted. "What? Tom is barely over twenty himself, and there was no Newgrounds back then, and the internet was also as unheard of!" he said softly as to not attract attention of the others in the crowd. "Don't but in, it shall all make sense in the end. For you see, twenty years ago, Tom found a way to use the technology to reverse time and create an enternal youth 'cycle'." said DanMalo. At this point Alkador was completely lost and didn't know what to do or say in response to this. As DanMalo continued his speech Alkador glanced at the other corners in the room and saw three others getting the same lecture and help from Saturday, Freakapotimus, and HAQnSPITT.

End Part XV. =P

Spoilers: Intro to boring explaination part. XD

At 1/20/05 01:56 PM, The_Redangleprince wrote:

Anyway, Quisty making me out to be a killer, how uncool ;_; and the worst part of it is, I'm trapped in a cage by SDG. How humiliating. I swear revenge upon her!!1

Who are you kidding? You know you liked it. Scary! He likes it if you torture him alot. >D

Anyhoo. ~X~ I know that you remember me! You're just trying to get me to single you out while I yell at you right?

I just got so confused reading all those poems and stories, and reading about people yelling at each other and reading other things on the page and reading the papers laying all around the desk here...it all just confused me.

So anyways, I got bored and decided to counter that LnL banner that (KIBA/BonusStage, who knows) made because I was bored. Since his/hers was all warm and fuzzy, I decided to make mine all bloody and gory and gross. Muahaha!

Hahahah, I realy love how you desicrated the good name of the late night louge Axe lol. The gorey, bloody, and rotting teeth is a nice point to look at. Seriously I like it hahah.

Nice story again Kiba/Bonus (ive gave up now, stop fucking with my head), also nice poem there DeathTuna, that one is one of my favourites you have written so far.

wow, you guys totally post too much :P
lotsa good poems.

At 1/21/05 01:18 AM, AncientX wrote: LNL pic

hey great pic, i like it.
post up that one you had as your MSN display pic... that was funny shit.
:O

Nice post Bonus...
For how quickly you throw them out, the quality of them is pretty good. I enjoy reading them... ^_^

Nice pic, it looks pretty dark and mysterious... makes us all look more interesting then we probably are.

At 1/20/05 06:32 PM, Slightly_Crazy_Dude wrote: 3 ramagi

You don't say.
Wow a lot great stuff poset recently. Now I got my 1000 review out of the way I can get back to writing.

At 1/20/05 06:32 PM, Slightly_Crazy_Dude wrote: Welcome Eldarion, to this fine establishment. Tis fun, and you should read at your own eril, because people always pull you up for not reading, bastards.

Hehe! Thanks for the warning buddy :D

Thats a weird fucking dream you had, maybe subconciously your afraid of being branded something, i dunno traitor/spammer/idiot i dunno, maybe just a feeling of rejection to a articular group, but your will pushed past it and you overcame, which is nice.

Thanks for your thoughts, I appreciate it. I was browsing through some dream site called www.dreammoods.com and checked out the 'dream dictionary' [LINK]. I'm normally sceptical about this kind of stuff and would lump this stuff in with astrology, which is bullshit, but I found it very interesting. Apparently, a dream in which you fight off the Devil shows that you will overcome your enemies or something.

I also had a weird dream last night, i was in a shower and came out soaking wet, balls hanging in the air, and then i go out into my bedroom and theres this hot chick sleeping there, so i cuddle in and ... well, you will have to imagine the rest, theres ladies present.

HAHA!
Those are the best kind of dreams :)
Maybe you'll find the meaning of it from that site, e.g. 'You are a pervert'.
lol :D

At 1/21/05 10:02 AM, ramagi wrote: You don't say.

That was supposed to be a <3 because of the thing you said about ~X being jealous of my 10k posts :)

Wow a lot great stuff poset recently. Now I got my 1000 review out of the way I can get back to writing.

Good good, i hope to see some soon.

At 1/21/05 02:45 PM, Eldarion wrote:
Hehe! Thanks for the warning buddy :D

No bother, its such an eclectic bunch of people here, its great fun....sometimes.

Thanks for your thoughts, I appreciate it. I was browsing through some dream site called www.dreammoods.com and checked out the 'dream dictionary' [LINK]. I'm normally sceptical about this kind of stuff and would lump this stuff in with astrology, which is bullshit, but I found it very interesting. Apparently, a dream in which you fight off the Devil shows that you will overcome your enemies or something.

Sweet, that sounds like a great site, and yes Astrology IS bullshit.

HAHA!
Those are the best kind of dreams :)
Maybe you'll find the meaning of it from that site, e.g. 'You are a pervert'.
lol :D

Nothing new to me :D

The Challenge

I did not get a whole lot of responces to the Challenge i proposed and i may have just skipped over posts, because i am in exams right now (doing alot of studying) and have been skimming through rather then fully reading lately (except Quisties and Bonus' stories). So if you were interested in participating in the challenge, then email me stating so and any ideas you may have for the challenge as well as your topic nomination.

Any other questions, email me about for now, because i am starting to do alot of studying now and exams don't end until February 1st.

Thanks guys.

Hopefully i will have more poetry for you guys to read soon. ^_^

OMG I love your sig marcus its sexy, but mine is even sexier hhahahahahhaha....

~X~

Since I have erratic paterns of sleep so it inspired me.
Sleep

We were together
Loving the days we spent in bed
As a pair content

In the quiet dark
We wrapped each other in warmth
Our souls were at peace

Like a girl in love
My mind and flesh ache for you;
I can't get enough

Like a wallowed skank
What I get won't do the job;
It's just not enough

Like a scorned lover
My soul is not satisfied
That it has lost you

With every eye close
Every thought, every cell
My body crys, "Sleep!"

Hear my pea, "Return!
End this unholy divorce
Love me, dearest Sleep!"

At 1/21/05 11:54 PM, ramagi wrote: Since I have erratic paterns of sleep so it inspired me.
Sleep

We were together
Loving the days we spent in bed
As a pair content

In the quiet dark
We wrapped each other in warmth
Our souls were at peace

Like a girl in love
My mind and flesh ache for you;
I can't get enough

Like a wallowed skank
What I get won't do the job;
It's just not enough

Like a scorned lover
My soul is not satisfied
That it has lost you

With every eye close
Every thought, every cell
My body crys, "Sleep!"

Hear my pea, "Return!
End this unholy divorce
Love me, dearest Sleep!"

It would be nice if you had a microphone and recored that poem... so then someone could possibly make a flash movie out of it.. but wow that was a great poem ramagi.

Well, I am just drunk. Not fall down drunk like I get some times, but I am buzzing pretty good. Chances are that by the end of the night I will not be able to type correctly. I just have to continue to drink this 30 pack of beer that I stole from the party =D

Good stories everyone. =D

This next part is a rather long one; but still short. When reading try to keep a mental image in your mind of what's being said rather than who is saying it. They are all giving the same speech, so just let it flow from one statement to the next and try to not be distracted by who is saying it. It was merely for dramatic effect. =P

Control-Part XVI

The discussions continued in the four ill-lighted corners. The deserters were all explaining the situation as quickly as possible, to eliminate the chances of being caught during this short break. "In 1985, the internet was just as popular as it was today." said DanMalo. "And Tom noticed the power that it contained." said HAQnSPITT. "He used the original Newgrounds to find the most useful people for his plan." said Saturday. "Once Tom found the people he needed, he asked for a gathering." said Freakapotimus. "The building of a device that could use the frequency of the infared rays and light rays cast from computer," said Saturday. "And matching that with the natural frequency of the human mind," continued Freakapotimus. "Mixed along with the large gathering of NG users," said DanMalo as the speech continued. "Allowed Tom to abudt the minds of NG users and turn them into data." concluded HAQnSPITT. "With all the data at his control Tom was able to send a high-pitched electromagnetic wave from the internet into every form of machinery in the world at once. Once this was done the world was tossed back twenty years and the energy surge that occured while Tom's mind was contained within the main server of the center database for all of the internet at the time caused him to obtain what he believed was enternal youth. But it seems he's noticed it won't last forever, and now he sees it must happen once more, for him to reach immortality." said the group.

End Part XVI. ;)

Spoilers: Yawn, plot development still...

well, everyone, Exams are really soon, so i have to start studying, which means I won't be on NG or even online very much for a week or so, so farewell from malice, and have a good couple weeks without my touching poems :P

The late night lounge was brimming with activity once again.
People were telling stories and writting poems.
X was rolling around in a pool of mini hotdogs like he normaly did on saturday mornings in the A.M. While Axe was busy castrating the occasional n00b that should wonder into the lnl with a plug for their thread.
Quisty was all greased up and ready for the wrestling match against SDG that was about to take place. The winner of the match got a years supply of band aids, so the stakes were pretty high.
Onic was just over in the corner passed out in a pool of his own vomit, urine, and feces.
Myst Williams was throwing pinnaples at redangle prince for no apparent reason.
And death tuna was having steamy sex with a watermellon. The watermellon had a face painted on it...so that was pretty creepy.
Slightly Crazy dude was walking around saying high to everyone then poking them with a dirty needle that he found outside of a hospital in an alley.
Bounus stage and yoink were playing a rousing game of monopoly. Which ended up in a fist fight over who owned boardplace.
Ramagi walked in and saw all of this and muttered these words:
"another normal night in the lnl."

At 1/21/05 10:22 PM, KlBA wrote:

At 1/21/05 09:19 PM, XwaynecoltX wrote: OMG I love your sig marcus its sexy, but mine is even sexier hhahahahahhaha....

i must take this up with master Denvish! only he could better such a feat! haha (you know he made this not me XD)

OMFG ~X~ laid the pwn down on Marcus for sheeze :D

yah me got PWNZ0RED...
by a vet.
the only way to get pwnd, so im not worying.
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MYST:::
WHAT IS THE CHALLENGE?

At 1/22/05 04:19 AM, Onic wrote: Myst Williams was throwing pinnaples at redangle prince for no apparent reason.

lol, i don't even like pinnaples, at least i was in the story. : )

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This is an excerpt from my current novel:

Walking down those empty and endless streets I had lost all my sense of direction. It was pouring hard a cold crisp rain, every step I took sounded as if I had stepped into a whole new puddle. The buildings were tall and compact like any city. The commercial windows were hazed and the distance was foggy, although, the layer of fog on the downtown streets hung high. The wide street was a little hilly, but it was barely noticeable and very smooth in transition. At the bottom of the subtle hills on the main street I dropped a little under the fog layer and could see the lake waters just after the street end. The waters glistened for the moon shone brightly and reflected a crystal resemblance within some of the fog. My vision seemed misty and all I saw was faded to a dark shade of blue. Only the flickering streetlights, beaming yellow, did not hold this odd sensation of navy color. I pulled my hood over my head shielding the almost painful fast falling rain.
Wandering down the middle of the street, all I could hear was the loud thumping of my heart. My heart, which was pressed up in my throat, felt like a swollen beating that was too close to my ear. It had an emotion of unrest, for my heart, a sixth sense, gave me a feeling of piercing eyes in my direction. I calmly looked over my right shoulder, but nothing was there except the sky which was clouded with darkness.
The buildings of brick seemed twisted as the rain appeared to only fall around me. In likeness to an adult looking over a child the buildings stretched up and over me with an eerie bend. Everything seemed warped to shape my movement, no matter how far I walked I felt as If I had not moved. The almost never empty downtown was motionless and still I felt as if I was not alone.
Walking further, aimlessly, my fear grew stronger as my heart beat faster. Scared, I quickly spun to my left; yet again, nothing. As I looked around, everything I could see molded together with the travel of my eyes. My head was spinning; my senses were on full alert. All my fears flushed me with anxiety. Past visions I could not remember flashed with a scream before my weary eyes. I felt helpless, my life with no meaning or cause. One dry tear fell and shaped my left cheek. All my pains, all my tears, and all my doubts had struck me in the face making me not want to continue on that never ending path.
I fell onto my knees, my hands pressed against the cold and smoothly paved road. I cried. As my eyes followed the one solid yellow line underneath me into the distance I saw a comforting silhouette far away. It was someone I knew and could not reach, but dreadfully wanted to. It was someone I loved, someone to comfort me. This was a journey of a long hilly road I could not travel on my own. The future was too hard to make out if I continued solely.
The streetlights blew off with a quiet yet high toned hum, all went dark. The neon moon lay solemn in the precious tides of a starry night. My heart throbbed faster then before, it was now, again, the only thing my ears could make out. The blue sensations of color began to seep to a bloody red. Cars began to speed by me; the sidewalks were busy with young and old. I sensed havoc; my fear grew more then before. I heard screams. People were yelling in pain, children running out onto the streets. The shrieks and breaking glass muffled the sound of my fast beating heart.
Adrenaline of impatience sparked an emotion of regret. My tears dried and I lifted myself to my feet. The rain that flowed into the sewer beneath me was a dark crimson red. Death thickened the air. Lives were taken all around me. I could not make out who were the victims and who were the killers. The screams never seemed to stop for rest. The speeding cars drove by without an ounce of remorse only caring for their own very lives.
I took one step forward, but something stopped me. A large hand tensely held my right shoulder and would not release me. Without looking back I broke myself free, running for my life. I never once looked behind me. I could not stop running. My heart was again throbbing in my throat. My eyes swelled and my hearing faded. I woke up.
With my neck stiff and erect off my pillow, I felt a cooling sensation over my body. I threw my head back onto my pillow but I was unable to force myself back to sleep.
Pushing the covers off of myself, I sat up to find myself drenched in a cold sweat. I put my hands on my face and closed my eyes, trying to discard the horrible images of my dream. I pushed back my hair out of my face and turned my body so my feet were on the ground. It wasn’t the best wake up call, but it did the job. That day, would be a hell of a long day.
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It is semi-based on a dream i had, but i exagerated it a lot to fit the plot of my book. Right now, it is just an un-edited scene, but once the novel develops it will play a large role.

Novel Update:
45% Written
33% Edited
2% Finalized

`Myst,

At 1/21/05 06:28 PM, KlBA wrote: haha sorry that i was never able to find out what the dream meant eldarion, but i may know why SCD had his :o

Oh really, please ellaborate :)

Nice poems ramagi and deathtuna, you guys are getting beter and better, keep it up.

The stories in here are getting out of control and i love it, keep up the good work Onic, Myst and Kiba.

Onic, i hope your around later tonight for my b33r battl3 with Al, it will be fun for sure.

At 1/22/05 11:49 AM, KlBA wrote: Myst - You're writing an entire book

Yup.

Did i miss something here :(

If that is directed to me, then i don't think so. I have been working on it since Sept 04 and i was just throwing in an un-edited excerpt for fun. I may post some more excerpts in the future.
I have a journal full of notes with about 200 different novel ideas... this is just my first. ^_^

Thanks for liking my story people that read it.
Hahaha, I'm still laughing at your story Kiba. Thats the kind of stuff that a few of us realy like to see, good job.
Yah SCD I will be there for the b33r battle tonight rooting you guys on. Plus I will crack open my 2 cases of budweiser that I have been saving so I can get drunk as well, good luck.

At 1/22/05 03:22 PM, KlBA wrote: ~X~ was using his iron fist to make Quisty ... nevermind that part.

lol! can i join?

In the corner Axe and Onic were supposedely playing cards, but i've never heard noises like that over a card game *shrugs.*

I'll join there too.

Myst was busy writing a book bigger than the dictionary since he one day aspired to be a great writer.

At least i didn't get a sexual joke. Its a sex novel. O_o lol just playin.

BonusStage was spamming everyone with sticky notes that basically said things like "OMFG LOLWTFK1337 BBQ" took some ritalin, and feel asleep :)

Doesn't surprise me. Where is he? I nthe gneral forum, oh ya!

deathtuna was sitting next to the window muttering to himself about some girl, and began to cry, and BonusStage gave him a big man huggle ^.^

*cough*

SCD was lying on the couch haven't violent seizures, but nobody seemed to pay any attention :)

I did, i just thought it was funny to watch. ^_^

Ramagi was doing something with that wand icon of hers, but the ignorant bonusstage had no clue what it was :(

OMG! Don't get me excited. : P lol

SDG was ripping off Redangleprince's and Aasha's skin, since she wanted to know what anime people looked like on the inside :)

Uhh...

Axe's LNL picture ate KlBA's :(

Aha, that was good.

Basically a normal day, until BonusStage raised his brass knuckles pulled a fonz, hit the jukebox and turned on Hoy te amo.
He began to dance just like Napoleon Dynamite, and soon everyone joined him on the dance floor.

Aha, omg! That is a funny story. I love it. Nice job. I should try a comedy type one too, i am sick of serious writing right now. Gives me a headache.

At 1/22/05 03:22 PM, KlBA wrote: ~X~ was using his iron fist to make Quisty ... nevermind that part.

That wasnt Quisty that was DaSadGirl O_0 Quisty was sleeping, oh and thank you DaSadGirl ROFL....

In the corner Axe and Onic were supposedely playing cards, but i've never heard noises like that over a card game *shrugs.*

Dont mind them they have always been fond of eachother ROFFL...

BonusStage was spamming everyone with sticky notes that basically said things like "OMFG LOLWTFK1337 BBQ" took some ritalin, and feel asleep :)

I think thats normal for BS....

SCD was lying on the couch haven't violent seizures, but nobody seemed to pay any attention :)

Ya he dreams of being like X someday ROFL...

Ramagi was doing something with that wand icon of hers, but the ignorant bonusstage had no clue what it was :(

OH MY...

SDG was ripping off Redangleprince's and Aasha's skin, since she wanted to know what anime people looked like on the inside :)

Who the hell is Aasha is that like a gay lover or something?

He began to dance just like Napoleon Dynamite, and soon everyone joined him on the dance floor

OH NO not that freak OMG ROFL...

~X~