This is my first story in awhile, so if it's rusty, I'm sorry! I've responded to all comments below the story... so enjoy!
"I Am"
Electricity
Part I
The bar was noticeably empty. Only Lotus sat there, silently, sipping his beer - even the bartender had gone to bed. He glanced at his watch - it was quarter to three. "Two hours of drinking," he thought to himself. It was then that the dim bar lights flickered - and in a flash, they went out. The moon was full - there was enough light to see - but the entire villa had a sort of eerie feel to it as looked around to gain his bearings. As he looked around, he heard quick footsteps from far away. He drew a pistol from his side, and stood up from his seat.
It was at that moment, that a gunshot broke the stillness in the air. Lotus now ran towards the direction of the bullet, loading his gun as he moved. "It came from down there," he muttered aloud as he turned into the hallway, grunting and nearly out of breath.
He went to the room where he thought it must've come from - he opened the door to Ghost's room.
Ghost was spread across the ground, his back pointing up, in a pool of blood. Lotus gaped - even he wasn't expecting something this violent. He pushed the body over, to find that Ghost' sheart had been removed from his body. Blood splatters stained the carpets and the walls, and Lotus felt sick.
"What's going on here?" asked Snype as he burst into the room, grasping a shotgun in both hands - the gunshot had awoke him from his sleep. Seeing Lotus in the corner of the room, he aimed the shotgun upwards towards him. "... you didn't?" asked Snype suspiciously, as he took another glance at Ghost's body.
"I... I swear, I didn't do it!" exclaimed Lotus. He was scared now - Snype was known as one to shoot first, ask questions later. "Please! I didn't!"
"I guess...," muttered Snype, deciding to let reason take hold of him for once - but then he noticed Lotus's blood-stained hands. They had been covered in red when Lotus moved Ghost to see his chest - but the evidence in front of him was enough for Snype. "You fucking liar!" he screamed, firing both shells of his shotgun straight into Lotus's gut. Blood poured from Lotus's wounds, and he fell onto his knees, crying in pain.
Snype, sneering, tossed his shotgun aside, and pointed a pistol he had drawn at Lotus's head. "I'm embarrassed to have called you friend," Snype spoke softly, and pulled the trigger.
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Ghost's Death
Part II
Ghost bled from his chest. A wound in the shape of a crater was where his heart once stood, and he was on his knees, coughing out blood, gasping for air.
"You fucking cunt!" he gasped, reaching an arm out for his attacker. But the man simply took a step backwards and laughed. "God damn you, Strauss!" Ghost cried, but the sound was muffled by the blood caught in his throat. Only a few seconds later, Ghost collapsed onto the floor, succumbing to his wounds.
"It was kinder than you deserved," Strauss spoke softly, chuckling to himself a little. "Finally - I am the Godfather." He looked at Ghost one last time, sneered, and ran off before anyone noticed.
Fin
(I'd love to take any comments, positive or negative.)
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At 2/19/08 07:17 AM, MrTrivia wrote:
I wish I could have talked more as well. Seeing as how we're both career neutrals in terms of auras, I'm sure there's a lot we could discuss. As much as I dislike seeing a club veteran go, I wish you good luck with all your future endeavors.
Don't worry Triv -- I'm not leaving. That was a note that you'll be seeing me around more often. I'm sure we'll have the chance to talk in the coming days. I'm sorry if that sounded like a farewell, but it was actually an apology for never talking to you while I was still around here. :P
Go neutral!
Before I forget Triv, has Regus-MK-IV been around lately? I always remember he was so good at that weapons post of his...
At 2/19/08 02:31 PM, PenitentTangent wrote:
And another thing, how is it t-OMGWTFNOMAD. I haven't seen you in ages! I nearly completley forgot about you, too! Damn am I happy to see you again. Glad you were able to avoid impending doom long enough to stop by.
Haha, I couldn't resist. A year later, and I couldn't keep myself from going to Newgrounds (:D). You were always the most fun to put in stories. Because I'd always kill you. But still, it's great to see you around -- congratulations on becoming the "Special Projects Head" - fun stuff.
Sorry I didn't include you in this last story (below), but I wanted to give some other people the chance at being brutally murdered and scarred for life. I do hope you don't mind! :P
And Nomad, for your story parts; Cowardly, I suppose so. But it's paranoia that keeps me safe ; )
:P
At 2/19/08 02:58 PM, DarkLotusJuggalo wrote:
I haven't talked to Prower for some time now myself, I remember he was the one who walked me through all the rules and how everything worked here, I miss ya bro, I'll send ya a PM sometime to see how everything is going. :)
Haha -- Prower was a good guy. But it should be of some concern to us if our caps aren't showing up as regularly as they used to... or is that true with the whole club nowadays?
Thanks! I always made it my objective to give as much input as possible on stories here and I even wrote a brief one myself, nothing too great or anything but it has potential to become something great, I think will begin work on that again soon, good to see you around man! :)
A reviewer -- yeah, I would always write stories, but because I'd be too lazy, I'd never review anyone else's. But with the number coming in nowadays, it might be worth it to give a bit more feedback than usual. xD
That would be great man, I missed some of the Battle Royale myself but from what I did see it was awesome and from what I remember of your stories, I would be more than happy to see more from you.
I would always seem to inactive right when they would come out. Too bad. I lived for the stories in this club. Anyways, I hope you don't mind, but I made you the lead of the story I wrote below -- hope you don't mind blood! :D
At 2/19/08 03:26 PM, Snype wrote:
ZOMG YAY! I feel important. Great for you to stop by, I was wondering whethe reality caught up or just that you didn't really feel like posting here. What collab are we talking about anyway? Hahah, I seriously do not remember any collaboration effort here, except for either Flash or Battle Royale...
Haha -- I offered to make a minor story collab the day I left. You and a few others responded, but I decided then that Newgrounds wasn't worth the trouble and I left for about a year or so. :P
I'm the one who's cannon fodder all the time! At least I go out guns blazing most of the time, which I like. For once, I want someone to kill me in a way so brutal and hirrific it would make a small child's head explode if they even looked at it. GO!
... okay. You're on, my friend. After the story that's included in this post, I'll write a story in which you die in such a horrific manner, that it'd make a baby cry (you might regret this). :D
At 2/19/08 04:52 PM, Boris-4-U wrote:
Yeah well fuck you :P
Great to see you too man. :P
Honestly l'm not even sure. Probably not though, l've been here for about 900 pages lol. But yeah l'm obviously not that active anymore, way to much shit on my plate right now, l only get about an hour on the computer every 5 days now. Having a life sucks i don't know why people make fun of those who don't. But yeah l'd like to see you more, not like anything l say has any weight though.
You were here when I first joined. But, you're still more active than I've been (uh... you posted here for the past few months -- I haven't.). And, life is actually a ton cooler than the internets -- but, the internet is great for burning time. Which is why I'm here right now. :D
And I (might) try to be here more. :P