I like it but...
I've seen this come thru a few times and get blammed every time.
I wish you would take my advise as well as others' advice. It needs some touching up.
The skit is really funny, though. I like all the alternate endings as well. But if it gets blammed again, WORK ON IT and clean it up. I see a lot of graphical errors and the beginning with the cornflakes takes too long. Speed it up. And make the Cornflakes the tan-grain color they should be.