Hope Dies Last....
This was very nice because of the use of silence. Instead of overwhelming the viewer with a barrage of sound and frenetic graphics, you kept the viewer's attention by doing the opposite.
I enjoyed it very much, though I thought the story was somewhat cynical ... heh....
By the way, I loved that portrait in the safe and the message on it: "Best of luck son luv Dad." Priceless. ;->
Intresting
Wow, I mean. Just wow. I was literally mind numbed just to watch this. I couldn't turn away. The thought of clowns scares me, but I wanted to know what happened. A bit dragged out though but that is how Silent/Black and white movies are supposed to be. It is good but I doubt I will ever watch it again. Good job though.
that clown was hot
i wanted to stick my cock inside that clown untill he blew that boloon right. i love you all.
Good work.
Great job. I gave you a 5 because I encourage artists
Things done well: --Well thought out plot. --I loved the transition that stayed on the house and tracked the course of the day until he returned. --I loved how you only showed him in clown until he took off his makeup and nose in the mirror. It was a clever, simple transformation of character. --I liked the plot and the wierdness of it. --I liked the "It's Hopless" woman at the beginning and end. Very very clever and well done. + I believe the text was cropped in your work, which rewards the savy watcher. --I liked how you made your character a sympathetic focus. He felt human.
Things that were soso: --Many things were overly deliberate. The GenPub might miss some things, but it's better then over doing it. 1)I would have liked to never see the mime again, and never be sure she robbed him, but even if we do see her again, you didn't need to have her cartoonishly pull out the money to show that she had it. She had the bag. I knew the money was in it instantly. Rely on your audience to fill in the blanks. 2) The family photos going up the stairs. Too much, you already showed her with a family. That was enough. 3) It was good to know that the leatherman was the dad, but a more subtle delivery may have been appropriate. --The pan to the sky at the end is the tail end of every-other student movie that I grade. I see it 10-15 times a semester.
Things that need work: If it's black and white you can't use the line-drawing filled in with 'color' approach because it's visually inane. The wonderful thing about black and white is it's ability to become completely abstract. A random jumble of black and white and grey can transform into a face or a room or an alley as the camera shifts or things move. Look at great old black and white movies for ideas about how to get a visual punch. Hitchcock is obviously up your alley, but really look at how the shots are constructed. Consider adding perspective rather than always seeing objects from the front. If you lack drawing skill, model the object in 3-D and place the camera to the side, or take a photo and convert it into a drawing. Those are just ideas, but do tackle the visual aspect of the medium. My favorite still was him passed out at the table shirtless with spittle.
Very Good, Very... Deep
I liked the style that you did that in, it reminds me of some story i once knew...