meh...
I admire your perserverance to do that kind of fbf... however, I had a few problems.
1. Regurgitated Anime Style - Please develop your own style. Even if it's anime, remember than even anime is a flexible style. Don't do the same exact style that everyone else does.
2. Panty shots - Yes, I see no problem with throwing in some fanservicing in every now and then, but this was just ridiculous. It was overdone. Don't do stuff like this just to get a few extra points on your batting average.
3. Energy blasts - I don't know if that was an energy blast or not, but PLEASE don't do energy blasts. They're stupid and overdone.