hmmm
Not bad, but if you were thinking of becoming a stand-up comidean you should just abandon your dreams right now.
Reviews for "A Men's Room Monologue"
wtf?
lol i didnt think anyone would have the patience to make a flash movie about the confines of the place they piss and shit but you proved me worng ...parts of it were funny animation was better than average. ehh thats it.
Oh no, Seinfeld has found us
Death to mild observational comedy. Amateurish graphics, novice voice-over, voted even lower lest this encourages others to start doing poorly-animated flash monologues about setting the VCR.
TYa
I didn't really like the video personally cuz it was boring you could improve by just doing it
well it was good material
good stuff, buuut the art and animation weren't too great, it was ok, nice to have visuals for stand up, but man, you have horrible delivery, I'm sorry. What you should have done was perform this for a live audience at an open mic night or something so you have a real crowd and laugh and everything. Even though a lot of it was funny, I didn't laugh because you didn't deliver well.
You really did write well, it was great, but you need to work on your performance because it was so boring to hear and it felt like you were reading it from a piece of paper...in fact, you probably were. If you write comedy material, at least be familiar with it so you can read it for laughs and not like your presenting a school powerpoint. I do stand up at my school, and was thinking about animating some of them, but I would definitely use the exact audio so as you give them a real comedy experience, otherwise, it'd be just as well if you just wrote the jokes out for us to read. :/ Good luck on improving, nice writing though.