Not bad, just different.
I always like seeing your attempts at something different, Firth. The NG whorde may yelp and demand the same old formulaic rubbish as long as it follows your typical style, but you should feel free to do what you want as an artist. And you've done that, so great!
I really liked the small details placed into this piece, such as the spoilsbury toast granny cameo, and your masterful depiction of the "shaking" that old people have. The vaguely mormon-looking citizens of the everything banned world cracked me up.
I have but one nitpick: the voice of the black banning character changed in tone and accent several times. At times he would sound southern and slow-speaking, and at other times he had a more booming, northern-US voice. It lacked consistency by far.