Once again!
I personally think that this is better than the first one humor wise. The introduction of more characters makes things better. I personally like Malon. She's much better in this than in the game. Once again, this is more realistic of an adventure such as this.
The best scene was the scene in the supermarket. That's way original.
I think you need to fix the text, still. Its not exactly on par. But overall, its the best!