It was nice, but...
I gotta say, the only thing i really had a problem with on this one was the timing. everything seemed sooooo slooooooow....i could tell you were going for that anime feel, but for me, i really don't think it helped progress the story along at a good pace. some of the lines could've been read by the actors quicker, and there was so much hesitation in action that i wanted to stop watching half way through. i'm only giving you these criticisms because i think you had a good thing going here, you just needed to keep the pacing firing all the time. besides, if you make it faster, the people that pick up on jokes slower will have to watch it multiple times to get all the jokes and stuff.
anyway, keep improving.