This was pro, man. Pro!
Ooh, what to say what to say! This was very well done, I can't decide where to being breaking it down.
First off - the visuals were exelent. Very nicely drawn, I must say. The spark effects wern't top of the line, but that hardly takes away from your spectacular use of anime-esque animation. It was well cued and worked very well for what you were trying to pull off.
The audio was awesome, or perhaps i'm a sucker for anyone who can speak another language fluently (aside from english) especially Japanese. The background accompanyment was also very nice. It wasn't irritating, and blended very well in with the atmosphere, both the violin-based standard background and the (random!) battle music.
The storyline thus far was fine. It's a good build into another animaton with this character as a lead female, but if you want to pull of a continuation, some new plot will have to be thought out. It shouldn't be too hard to do since you have a fresh character with nearly endless possibilities. I'll be looking forward to your progress!
In conclusion, this was a solid effort! Keep up the good work!
~SplitAllegiance
PS: Was that Domo-kun who played her father, or something close to it?