Brilliant
I think just about everything came together here. I only skimped on humor because it wasn't laugh-out-loud funny, but still humorous. You pegged both the FF style, and the Japanese flavor. You Japanese was good, too (better than mine I'm sure!). You certainly deserved to pass, and this is a shining example of what NG could be. One small complaint; the voice acting seemed a bit stilted in parts. No biggie. I'd love to see more of your work here. Gambatte!
Pros: just about everything
Cons: voice acting is iffy in parts
Suggestions: Just give us more of this caliber!