i was testing to make sure
that the 3d would load on the flash player lol
Reviews for "'Asteroids' music video"
Bezman responds:
Fair enough I guess... although this really doesn't seem like the best way to tell me that.
You could have e-mailed me...
In any case, good luck with the movie.
Cool!!!!
It's definately a good song you chose to use, it fits in extremely well! The movie is pretty good in almost every aspect.
This is kind of on the short side of things, but it's definately enjoyable. Anyone whos ever played the original (ie: everyone) will be sure to enjoy this!
The special features were a nice addition as well!
Hopefully, youre future works will be as good as this as well!
Bezman responds:
I actually chose the song before making the video - that's why it fits in so well. :p
It actually has nothing to do with the game. It's just the name of the song.
Glad you liked my written words. :)
Thanks for the review. I'm working on a full version of this, which should be even better!
And I always try to improve. ;)
Stay funky,
Bez
Nice...
It is a pretty good movie, it is maybe the best movie of yours I have ever seen, I enjoyed watching it.
First of all, the graphics is pretty damn good. Your charecters are pretty well drawn, they look like real people, like real astronauts. However, in the part of "You are a boy, I am a girl", they were pretty awfully drawn. You only showed lines in this bright purple of yours, and it didn't match anything, neither the enviournment nor the style of the movie. The backgrond was also pretty good, however, the space at first doesn't really look like the real space as it is seen from below. The blue and green and red doesn't match the reality. I like the way the astroid is drawn, it was in a very good drawing style like a drawing of a 5 years old girl, it was very nice. I like the drawing style of everything in this movie, it all looked like a 5 years old girl's drawing. The animation also matched the graphics style, the frame-by-frame like animation adds a lot to the graphics' style and the style of the submission. So as the real animation. Just fix the background of the sky at night and the charecters with the purple colour.
Second of all, the style of this movie was pretty good, everything matched the song which you chose, as well as it's meaning. the fact that you chose this movie to have a drawing style of a 5 years old drawing, is very good and it added a lot to the style of this fantastic clip. However, the fact that the background of the space is not really like the reality, or not like the other drawings, is pretty bad. The atmosphere you built in this movie was also pretty confusing, you changed the atmosphere of the movie every second (the window, the purple charecters, the astroid etc.). This quick change of the enviournemnt and atmosphere takes a ot of points from the style of the movie. You should stay in the same atmosphere all the time, or if you change the atmospheres, change them slowlier than in this movie. So, in general, the style in this submission is pretty good, just try and match the slowliness of the song to the atmosphere change.
Third of all, the sound in this movie was very, very good, it was a pretty good choice for a clip like this one. First of all,the atmospheres you built matched the song. However, you changed them to fast for a slow song like this one. The graphics style of the movie matched the song and it's message to the world. The song also matched the animation in this movie perfectly in the movie aspect. The song is also pretty good as it is, I enjoy listening to it even without a movie, although the movie adds a lot to it in many ways. So, the song is a great choice, but 10 is perfect so...
Fourth of all, the script of this movie really represents the saying ion the movie literally, but you didn't get into it's deeper meaning a lot... Although you showed the song as it is in simple words on the screen, you didn't show us anything too great that we couldn't picture to ourselves. You should also add an aspect from your point of view on this movie, something special that e don't know. Without it, it is pretty boring, because I can picture everything I see there with my brain. so you should add something that we don' see everyday, something which we wouldn't imagine by the words of the song. In other words, show us things beyond the simple words.
Anyway, it was a pretty good movie, very nice job, well done. (i hope I get 8\10 for this one >.<)
>Lidov<
Bezman responds:
Though you choose to present your review as four discrete points, it seems to me that you're almost doing yourself a disservice. Each paragraph makes a number of points, with little waffle and an amazing amount of content.
You open with a positive comment, but you don't let your high regard of the animation get in the way of making constructive criticism and giving a number of suggestions.
Two points I don't fully agree with - the insinuation that the background /should/ look anything like space or that the wibbly purple people didn't match anything else. However, your thoughts seem carefully considered and carefully explained. They provoked me to think about your words, consider things I may not have considered. And that's possibly the best thing a review can do, from the point of view of an author (I think).
I wouldn't have understood what exactly you were meaning by 'the atmosphere' when you say:
"The atmosphere you built in this movie was also pretty confusing, you changed the atmosphere of the movie every second"
However, the phrase in parantheses meant I quickly realised the gist of your meaning more exactly.
"Third of all, the sound in this movie was very, very good, it was a pretty good choice for a clip like this one"
The sentence above seems to insinuate that I would have created the animation first (or at least started it), before choosing the song. I'm sure you realise the opposite is true and everything was simply made to fit the song though.
Your final paragraph is a wonderful one, again stating things that needed to be held up to my face. Delving more into general musings and thoughts regarding the genre, the words go beyond giving simple advice about the elementary constituents, such as the graphical competence, the balance of colours or whatever.
A mode of thought like that - changing the intent to "add an aspect from your point of view on this movie, something special that [we] don't know"; "get into it's deeper meaning" is a change in the way of thinking that can have greater repercussions.
Of course, the two - intent and skill - are both important. But rarely do I recieve a review which pauses to reflect on the latter.
Any criticism I make of your review is simply a nit-pick in order to fulfill what I see as obligations in any review.
Firstly, you have a few typos.
Secondly, I think your sentences could be better formed; they are slightly slumsy at time. At some points I felt your sentences might have benefitted from a semicolon or a dash.
Thirdly, your reviews title - 'Nice...' seems a rather weak opener.
None of those points detracted in any real way from the content of your review, which was magnificent.
I would have been interested to hear about your thoughts on my special features, or if you didn't consider it worth even beginning to read them.
But really. This review is awesome. Any improvements would simply serve to bring it that much closer to perfection.
Thanks for writing this review and giving me such excellent feedback. Seriously. Thank you.
I rate your review - 9/10
Well done!
A really unique flash movie. Ot was nice to see taht you added the Special Features BEFORE the movie began, giving the viewer something to do during the load (although the load is far from being long).
The drawings weren't the greatest, however because this was about a dream, realism in the drawings is hardly necessary.
In terms of improvement, there isn't really much I can tell you. The only thing I would perhaps improve would be the general length of ten flash (which in this case, was quite short). Other than that, it had just about everything! Keep it up!
Bezman responds:
review of your review: A good useful review.
Starting off with some general nods of approval, you then specifically praise the time when the special features loaded.
You made a vague criticism with reservations re: art.
Then you made a specific suggestion re: length before rounding off with a positive summary.
Though not very long (not that it's very short either), your review does have praise, specific criticism, and a summary. All the essential elements in other words.
You do have a typo in the 1st line, "...flash movie. Ot was nice..." but that's of little consequence.
It'd be nice if it was longer and gave yet more specific feedback on anything you may have liked about the movie itself or any other criticisms.
Is the length the only real imperfection? In what way could the art have been better? Colours? Technical analytical accuracy?
5/10
A useful review and one better than a lot of NG reviewers'.
Very touching, I really liked it.
Well first I have to say that was a very touching flash, it gave me a tingling feeling throughout my body and the music went absolutely perfect with everything that took place within the movie and there was a touching feeling coming from both the music and the animation itself. I was a little disappointed by the ending though, when the purple creature went across the screen it gave you the sense that something was about to happen and I felt let down when it just ended instead, perhaps you could have just had it scroll up to shwo the boy and the girl going off together or just shown something small but meaningful like a star twinkling or something, as that would have felt more like an ending as you wouldn't have been introducing something new only to do nothing with it, but in general that was a really good movie and I look forward to seeing more of your stuff.
Lots Of Love, Rebecca Rose
Bezman responds:
You know, that entire review is 2 sentences. Your English teacher would be shaking his/her head.
Seriously though, it does make it a tad harder to read and is a bit of a blemish on such an otherwise lovely review. Split up your sentences and use multiple paragraphs, I'd advise.
Your reviews really do come from a different angle than most people's. Your criticisms regarding the ending are brilliantly expressed, and you make some nice suggestions to boot and elaborate upon your reasoning, which is great.
I didn't really consider such reactions, and maybe didn't plan out the ending in the way I should have. Reading your review helps me realise things I should keep in mind.
Seriously, that's a brilliant criticism, brilliantly written.
The first sentence was nice and flattering to read, whilst you finish off with a nice summary and an upbeat nod.
Other than the fact that you use 2 sentences and no paragraphs, my only comment for possible improvement is that maybe another criticism would make the review even greater.
Having said you love it, feel free to get really pernickety. It all gives me something to think about and work on for next time.
I give your review 7/10.
Thanks again, specially for the brilliantly written criticism, which was on a subject I hadn't previously heard a word about.