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{ - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - }

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LONG POST! Please be considerate to read it all before you post something.

Well, seeing as how this is my 1337 post, I wanted to make it a momentous post, rather than something that says "Hey look, this is my leet post!" No, rather, I actually took the time to do something that is interesting, and therefore, I made a poem. This poem, has nothing to do with NG, and frankly doesnt really relate to the kind of person I truely am. However, I wanted to write something that was relavent to me in some ways, but had a dark twist. I wrote this poem over an hour, and hopefully you guys enjoy it. Be warned however! This poem/post is quite long! SlipperyMooseCakes has been wanting me to post a short post for ages now, but I am not going to give him that pleasure...EVER! (By the way, Poems dont have to rhyme for all the people who didnt already know that)

Anyway, without further a due (sp?) I give you my poem entitled "Repetitive Dreams And Reality."

Sometimes my dreams and reality tend to cross.
Its as if I'm never really sure if I am awake or asleep
I hear that faint repetitive sound that tends to shout "WAKE UP!"
My alarm clock... how annoying.
So off I go, to continue the race,
Where my repetitive life, wishes for adventures and excitement.
most of the time, that adventure never knocks on my door.
But there are those momentous occasions, where excitement hits me like a brick.
I feel my heart start to pound, my muscles start to tingle.
They call it the 'flight or flight' drug...
But most of you guys know it as adrenaline.
The adrenaline rapidly spreads to prepare the body.
It prepares the body to explode with energy,
but sometimes, all the energy is a waste.
For you only need enough energy to say a simple "Hello."
... The firl you want to be with finally noticed you.
She smiles and waves her hand as a simple jesture.
You think to yourself, "What a beautiful smile."
One of these days, I'm actually going to do something.
One of these days, I shall be overwhelmed with courage.
One of these days... my life will change.

I often tend to ponder, about the life thats all around ,e.
About the little curiosities and insignificant objects.
Whether they be as small as why the grass is green,
or wondering about something as big as human emotions.
I think about everything and anything that pops into my mind.
But often, my mind clouds with fear and doubt.
It makes me feel cold and dark,
as if I were stuck in the middle of nowhere with no food or water.
It's that feeling of torture which prevents me to spread my wings.
But just when all hope is lost, theres a shiver of light.
It shines through a tiny hole, but it shines so bright.
As quickly as it came, the light was is able to overcome the darkness.
The small hole rapidly becomes a giant opening.
That's when my wings were able to spread...
I pushed my wings down and up, and down, and up.
I shifted my heads upward and looked up towards the light, and took off.
Just as I was going through the hole, I heard something.
It was a faint sound, but it was repetitive.
It got louder and louder... and more familiar with every second.
My eyes were still closed but I decided to open them.

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I was lieing in my bed, with the alarm going crazy.
It was time to wake up...
Time to continue that race.
But today is different,
because it was time to face reality,

But not in the dark.

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And that is my poem. Hopefully everyone here liked it, or at least, those who actually read it. There was a message by the end of the poem, not sure if I made it clear, and if many people even got it, but for those who did, hopefully it was understood. I wrote these words from the heart, and some might think its EMO, and I would say so too. But trust me, I am in no way, shape, or form EMO. I just often tend to write complex emotions within my writings, most of which I write, I have never really experienced. After saying that, some people may think of me as a pser EMO, and I guess in some aspects thats true, even though I dont want to be.

Lets just leave it as I enjoy writing these mostly because I dont write these very often. Whenever I do, I feel enlightened.

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In any case, please feel free for all of you who read the poem to give me constructive opinions. I like the phrase "If you dont have nothing nice to say, then dont say nothing at all," because it fits for so many occasions *hinthint*. However, I am open minded to people who have any kind of negative feedback, however, please leave "reviews" that are friendly and get a point across. If you didnt like it, dont be a complete dick about it. Just state the fact that you didnt enjoy this and an explanation would be nice.

This is it, the end of my 1337 post, I want to thank everyone who was actually considerate enough to actually read the entire post, and I must thank you all very much for your time. Until next time...


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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-01 19:15:04


wow.. that's um.. pretty cool..


I like it.

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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-01 19:16:13


Very nice poem.
It's unbelievable youve put only an hour in it.

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-01 19:19:01


u shoulda just roffled and said that u should be a admin


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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-01 19:20:35


wow keep it up


I'm back....

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-01 19:21:18


I've been studying poetry in English for 2 years now and that seemed good. It had all the stuff most poets use, repetion, lots of detail.

If you decide to make another try to use some onamatoepeia(sp?). Or try to make a poem with some kind of rhyming scheme that has a cool rhymth. Since poems like that rule.


Metal Hell ## Guitarists ## Stand Up Comedy

PSN: Look-a-Hill

Somewhere Over the Rainbow

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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-01 19:22:17


Wow, that's pretty awesome! by the way, congrats on 1,337 posts.

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-01 19:22:51


FAG.


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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-01 19:25:53


Hahaha, this has to be your longest post ever in all enternity. But you know what, i'll always own you. You know why, because I like cheesecurls and the reason why that owns you is because they are orange.

Haha, congrats on your 1337 enjoy it while you can. I'll see you around and HOPEFULLY you will post a little less =p

Cya round, SMC.

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-01 19:33:58


Eh Emo you may be but who really cares... whats the problem with emo anyway? I liked your poem NC it gave me good vibes and as I was reading it, I could kind of make a mental picture with your lines. Just a very nice piece about life. Thanks for sharing. Peace

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-01 23:40:16


Well, the big moment is over, and this should be my 1339th post. Meh, it was fun while it lasted, and I am glad that post wasnt wasted. I tried to hang onto it for as long as I could, a few hours maybe, but it was inevitable. In any case, I appreciate all the responses that I got from the poem. Some were more in depth than others, but all the replies were generally good. Except for that one guy who just said FAG, but, I made sure he got his ass banned (haha, thanks Osamarama). Anyway, I really enjoyed making that poem, and I suppose I will make one again when I get a bit of inspiration. Thank you for your time, and here is one final picture to remember (for me at least).

{ - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - }


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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-01 23:43:13


Poems that dont rhyme = 5uxx0r.

I know you will probabily say some bullshit about me being artistically disabled and shit, but when I was little I used to read a lot of peotry, my favorites were ones that had rhyme and rythem.

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-01 23:46:13


good job 1337y =)

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 00:02:12


The battlefield is lined by knights
. . . . . . . . . . Fighting for their honor.
One hears through noise and sees through sights
. . . . . . . . . . The battle’s conqueror.

Chivalrousness, he sure did boast.
. . . . . . . . . . A man advised to him,
“You may have more of that than most,
. . . . . . . . . . But it costs life and limb.”

To this damper he paid no heed.
. . . . . . . . . . The battle dawned his day.
The fear he felt was none indeed;
. . . . . . . . . . All foes’ past ills would pay.

He struck a man from their side dead,
. . . . . . . . . . Converging on his kill.
For this he stood there and he said,
. . . . . . . . . . “Good King, I do your will.”

A proudly standing man was he,
. . . . . . . . . . If only in his head.
The quick strike that his eyes don’t see
. . . . . . . . . . A coffin be his bed.

His now red armor once was clean,
. . . . . . . . . . And helmet once intact;
But now they both had lost their sheen,
. . . . . . . . . . With lord he made a pact.

“I must get up to end this strife
. . . . . . . . . . For my people need me.”
So with these words he resumed life.
. . . . . . . . . . “By your gift it shall be.”

His newfound strength smote twenty men.
. . . . . . . . . . His sword he swung with ease.
The battle he had turned again
. . . . . . . . . . And master he did please.

His best of friends, a merry man,
. . . . . . . . . . From behind blood-stained cloak,
Cried out to him, “What is your plan?
. . . . . . . . . . And how did you not croak?”

He answered in his booming voice,
. . . . . . . . . . “I’ll help you take that hill.”
For other, humor was his choice,
. . . . . . . . . . “I cannot die, that’s swill!"

He swarmed the hill, and very quick.
. . . . . . . . . . With good man at his side.
An arrow flew sharp, long, and thick;
. . . . . . . . . . Stuck in his friend, he died.

That empty hill, now, was taken.
. . . . . . . . . . In victory he danced.
A man though dead, they found fakin’
. . . . . . . . . . That final man was lanced.

How quickly though did he forget?
. . . . . . . . . . The covenant he made.
His people’s victory was set,
. . . . . . . . . . So winnings must be paid

His gleaming suit reverts to dull
. . . . . . . . . . Its use had gone away.
A lighted tunnel caused his lull
. . . . . . . . . . The sun set on his day.

He felt he was at home at last,
. . . . . . . . . . But it was not to be.
For from the tunnel flames did blast
. . . . . . . . . . “Eternal heat for thee.”

I apolgize for not responding earlier, but I had to find my ballad that I wrote last year to post first. I thought your poem was good, but I'm a huge fan of structure and rhyme. Still, very cool, I like things like that that make me think, and that was certainly no exception.

Congratulations on your 1337 post. I saved the picture of mine, it's the only non-evenly divisble by 1000 screen shot that I saved of my post count.

Anyway, I hope you enjoyed my ballad. Comments?


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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 00:18:06


At 5/2/05 12:02 AM, Evark wrote: Great epic poem.

Wow, that was excellent, I shall post more about it below.

I apolgize for not responding earlier, but I had to find my ballad that I wrote last year to post first. I thought your poem was good, but I'm a huge fan of structure and rhyme. Still, very cool, I like things like that that make me think, and that was certainly no exception.

That is perfectly fine that you didnt respond earlier, better late than never. Anyway, I thank you very much for that compliment. I am sure I would have been able to do much much better if I had spent a good day to a week or so on it. In any case, I was focusing more on making you think, and it appears that I have accomplished that.

Congratulations on your 1337 post. I saved the picture of mine, it's the only non-evenly divisble by 1000 screen shot that I saved of my post count.

That picture is the only real picture I saved of my post count, though I guess I will save my thousand pictures.

Anyway, I hope you enjoyed my ballad. Comments?

All I have to say was that that ballad was excellent. I loved the fact of how you used a older english style to utlize in this poem. It certainly was fitting, especially since I take it took place back in the medieval times. It had a great sense of imagery (I am going to make a thread tommorrow telling people to post stories that show imagery, should be interesting to see how people try to depict images, if you post in there, it will undoubtably be great). Anyway, this was excellent, and if I wouldnt be surprised if you turned out to be a professional some day.

Thank you for your time.


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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 00:29:07


At 5/2/05 12:18 AM, -NightCrawler- wrote: Wow, that was excellent, I shall post more about it below.

Thanks. :-)

That is perfectly fine that you didnt respond earlier, better late than never.

That's my philosophy on the subject. Although, in my case it's usually "late or never" instead of "better late than never." Procrastination is a bitch and a half.

Anyway, I thank you very much for that compliment. I am sure I would have been able to do much much better if I had spent a good day to a week or so on it.

Poetry is only bad to me if it offers no interesting imagery or any sort of thinking things. I really have a hard time finding terrible poetry, unless it's some sort of coffee shop crap where it's just single words strung together with random drum beats. Needless to say, I liked yours.

In any case, I was focusing more on making you think, and it appears that I have accomplished that.

Indeed.

That picture is the only real picture I saved of my post count, though I guess I will save my thousand pictures.

Yea, exactly. None of the other ones are important, and even the specific posts themselves aren't that big of a deal.

All I have to say was that that ballad was excellent.

Thank you muchly.

I loved the fact of how you used a older english style to utlize in this poem. It certainly was fitting, especially since I take it took place back in the medieval times.

I tried to give it an authentic feel to it. It is a Medieval Ballad, so I wanted to not only have a medieval subject, but also a medieval feel and sound to it (the beats are dead on for the style of ballad, I guess you could technically put it to music and sing it... true ballad style).

It had a great sense of imagery (I am going to make a thread tommorrow telling people to post stories that show imagery, should be interesting to see how people try to depict images, if you post in there, it will undoubtably be great).

Sounds cool. I'm in. I'll probably just end up posting that again though, as I don't have the time to write something new (unless it's a crappy in the moment thing, in which case I wouldn't really want to subject people to that anyway).

Anyway, this was excellent, and if I wouldnt be surprised if you turned out to be a professional some day.

Thank you, I have been toying around with trying to get that published or something, but I'll probably not get around to it. I do enjoy poetry however, and have thought about going to school for it, but I think I would more enjoy another line of work... probably with more money involved. :-) Hey, I'm human.

Thank you for your time.

You're welcome, and likewise.

Oh, and the title of that is A Chivalrous Evil. Comments on the oxymoron and other stuff are welcome.


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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 00:40:47


My 1337 post was noted by nepthys.

Yea, I din't do anything special for it.

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 00:42:17


it would realy suck if a mod deleted this topic right now lol

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 02:03:08


"Roses are red
Violets are blue
-NightCrawler- wrote a poem
So I did too!"

I win.

Nah, just kidding. That poem was deep. *cough*emo*cough* <3 You know I'm playing. Seriously, I really liked that. It was tight! I give you your due respect. Congrats on your 1337 post.

I didn't even notice mine or my 1000. Wow. Congrats though. Nice work on the poem again and take care. KUTGW! lol.

Swigadig! Peace.


I'm not conceited...I'm convinced.

Also, I like to use ellipses.......a lot...

Xbox Live: GreenLanternDSC

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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 02:07:04


i'm crying


OmG hawttY<~~~~ click this....

u can pull my hair N my smack ass, N you bet i'll call you daddy

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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 02:21:10


omg. seeing as you obviously express emotion through your poem, it is SO emo.

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 21:53:53


At 5/2/05 02:21 AM, Ken_Korrupt wrote: omg. seeing as you obviously express emotion through your poem, it is SO emo.

Thats what some people think. Not quite sure if you were being sarcastic or not, but I believe you were. But in all seriousness, I am not emo, I just... write like one. In any case, I was going to start an imagery thread today, butI had no time, maybe later tonight... much later though. If so, I think it will be successful. Anyway, the emotions I expressed in my poem were not real... they were real, but over half of them I have never truely experienced. So... I dont know.. Anyway, Thanks for your time.


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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 22:03:14


Emo poem thread! Omg must post:

Driving
Cruising down a familiar neighbourhood
I'm comming up to your street.

I adjust the rear-view mirror
Your timid smile shines back

As we approach your house
Once more around the block?
I plead
And we pass by your house again.

The wind rushes through the window
As though your soft whisper

It is cool upon my lips
Like your lips
upon my lips

Can we go around the block one more time?
Can I drive you home?
Am I driving you crazy?

You drive me crazy…

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 22:05:25


That was good.

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 22:20:51


Lol, I've got poetry too.

Roughly translated from parisian french:

Oh, how the sky is beautiful tonight.
The ducks, they are singing:
Quack quack
Quack quack

I hold your hand
and whisper sweet nothings into your ear
My cabbage-cabbage
My flea.

Oh how I long to ravage you
but,
The ducks, they are gone!
Where have zey gone?
All gone!

You are sad, and I
feel
your pain
becasuse, those ducks
They were your only family.

Do not worry, mon cherie.
You will not suffer the same fate as they,
At least,
not toniiiiiiiiiiiiiiiight.

honhonhon

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-02 23:38:09


At 5/2/05 10:03 PM, ManateeGod wrote: You drive me crazy…

And I don't mean THAT way. WTF did you do to the internet?

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-03 00:03:22


That was a great poem, keep it up, andI hope to see more from you. G'day

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-03 00:19:04


That's punk rock, man. Far Out.


I GOT BLOOD ON MY HANDS AND THERE'S NO REMORSE I GOT BLOOD ON MY DICK CUZ I FUCKED A CORPSE

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Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-03 00:21:52


my poem > your poem

(plus, I wrote it in like.....4 minutes)

Some lead
some follow
I stand and laugh
as the people are misled
and destroyed by their past

Their T.V.’s are on and playing
the same desperation
the same message spoken in twenty different ways
the same slanted stories told by the same disinformists
from a corrupted hand their salaries are paid

It’s just disinformation
said again and again
It’s just disinformation
watch as the lies multiply
time and time again

The same depravity
found in the thousands of imperfect sources
the newspapers print
hundreds of lies
and it’s eaten by the puppets trampled by the king’s horses

the disinformation
it’s found everywhere
as it obscures the truth
perhaps we don’t need to know
of all the death and decay
instead we’ll be blinded by the lies and watch them grow

I've got more, bitches.

Response to { - ..:. _ My 1337 Poem _ .:.. - } 2005-05-03 22:25:23


At 5/3/05 12:21 AM, TheLastDinosaur wrote: my poem > your poem

(plus, I wrote it in like.....4 minutes)

Well, I am not going to lie and say that wasnt a good poem, BUT MINES BETTER! Pbbt! Ok, maybe it can compete with my poem... maybe. But, in all seriousness, that poem was pretty good. I think 4 minutes might be an exageration though... I detect the truth to be 20 minutes, at least. If you truly did write it in 4 minutes, then I think thats phenominal and that you should be in a circus, because thats freakishly fast.


I've got more, bitches.

If you have more, by all means go ahead and post some. I am open to anything and everything, and I am sure other members might like to read this as well. Thank you for your time.


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